Hi Courtney! I love that you chose the god of love and desire to tell your stories! I chose a god to tell the stories of my storybook, as well! I love the part that you included about Cupid! I like that you added the part about wanting to read a basic love story then this storybook isn't for you. I like the honesty that you are giving to the reader. Also, this prepares readers for the epic love stories you are choosing to tell! Rama and Sita is definitely a good choice since Rama is the hero of The Ramayana. I am interested to see the story you tell of Ravana and Mandodari. I love the way that you wrote the introduction with so much personality. The attitude of the narrator is so sassy and I love it! I think that your stories will be great and I can't wait to read them!
Hi Courtney! Awesome idea of doing a love story and I can see that you are focusing on Rama and Sita as well. Also I liked how you included Cupid in your story, that is a clever idea! Rama and Sita are always a good choice since they are the main characters in the Ramayana, so their love story should be pretty simple. I'm really digging the fairytale vibe you're adding to your stories. I am a sucker for fairytales so your stories will be very interesting to me! Moreover, I'm looking forward to reading Ravana and Madodari! Since I already know a lot about Rama and Sita, I'm interested in reading the love connection between Ravana and Madodari. We always see Ravana as this cold hearted person and it would be different to see a different and soft side of him! Overall, I really like your storybook so far, the topic is love and I'm all about love stories! I am definitely looking forward to reading more stories and read all the love connections of these characters! Keep up the good work!
Courtney, I like how you decided to write about these epics love stories. I definitely think that this is a topic that must be explored. It is definitely interesting and something that I wanted to read about. I also liked how you decided to write from diary entries. I think that this is a great way to explore in depth each relationship form the each couple member’s own perspective. I think that it is great.
The layout of your site looks great. It is very clean and readable. However, I would recommend that you remove the search bar because there is no need for it.
I think that your story was very well written and I really saw no major grammar mistakes. If there was one thing that I would recommend it would be to exclude the part about Cupid. I really think that it was just useless information that didn’t add to your story. Overall, I think that it looks great.
First off, super cute picture! It looks like the Indian version of a Nicholas Sparks novel. Love it! Your introduction was very cute as well. I enjoyed the way you played off of the reader’s familiarity with Cupid as the bringer of love. I found the ethnicities part to be a little bit weird though. There was a little bit of confusion at the end of the introduction as well. I assumed that Kamadeva would be guiding us through all of the stories as he/she (I’m not really sure) states at the beginning, yet the end of the introduction it is telling the reader to read the stories ourselves.
The preview of each love story was had me excited. I am looking forward to seeing how you are going to tie Kama to these love stories. Was it Kama who shot them with a love arrow to get them to fall in love with one another? Great job! Looking forward to reading the rest!
Hi Courtney, I just wanted to say thank you for leaving such a nice comment on my Portfolio Story The Valakhilyas’ Plea. It is the nicest thing that anyone has ever said about my writing. To answer your question, I never really thought about directing movies and to be honest, I never pegged that horror was a genre that I was really good at writing. Anyway, thanks so much for your nice comments.
Courtney, I absolutely love your storybook!! We are basically writing from the same point of view, so, it is really nice to read someone else's introduction and first love story post. I like your layout a lot and the writing style. It is really witty and inviting. I also want to tell you that I appreciate you commenting on my blog throughout the semester and leaving me such great feedback! It has been so nice having a few classes with such a sweet girl. I really cannot wait to keep reading your storybook throughout the semester! You rock.
Courtney, I am commenting on Rama and Sita. First of all, I think that it was a very smart idea to have this told from their personal diary entries because it shows readers first hand, raw accounts of each character. I also liked that you chose to insert a disclaimer about how each entry has not been edited. It was a great way to get my attention, introduce what was going on, and give the reader insight into Rama and Sita’s minds.
I also liked that you decided to have their entries interlock to tell a full story. It was a great way to move the story forward. You did a great job here by giving each their own views and personal observations. Stylistically, I like that you chose to separate the entries by color and name. This helps the reader know who is speaking, and it keeps everything very clean and organized. Great job.
I am commenting on your storybook introduction and first story. I think your storybook sounds really interesting, based off of what I read in the introduction. I really like how you embraced the author being a god. By that I mean that I cracked up when I saw you refer to the photo at the bottom as "a photo of yourself." Anyway, your introduction was good.
For your first story, I feel like I was left hanging in a lot of places. I really liked the format and how you told the story from both points of view. However, I think you could have added a little more to each of the entries and filled in a few holes. Your idea is great, but I think it just needs to be fleshed out a little more. I am really looking forward to reading more of your stories and learning about other love stories of the gods!
I very much enjoyed that you chose to write your first story form the perspective of, not one, but both Sita and Rama. It was very interesting to hear both sides of their story. It made me think of movies when you can hear what each character is thinking. It really gives you so much opportunity to give your character his/her own personality. I loved the little comment you made about Sita not being interesting in politics. I was a little confused because you went from Rama not being able to look at Sita to them all of the sudden meeting. How did they meet exactly? I feel as though that is something important to add. I definitely would have liked to hear a little bit more emotion for both Sita and Rama. Since it is a love story, there should be more distinguishing personality in their journal entries, as well as more emotion. Overall, good job!
Introduction: I like the concept of writing of the God of Love introducing these diaries of couples in love. The fact that you made him related to Cupid was a cute little addition. Now, I like that you're going to use diary entries for both man and woman of the couple, that way we see both perspectives. I really like that! However, it would have also been pretty cool to tell the love stories from the perspective of Kama. Since you use him as the narrator of the introduction, it seems like that was where you were going with it. He could talk about his involvement in their meeting and how he made them fall in love.
I didn't feel like Rama and Sita had their own distinct voices in their journal entries. What I mean by that is the journal entries for both of them are written with the same tone and feeling. It sounds like either one of them could have written those. I think it would beneficial if you really picture what they're like. What are their personalities? How are they different? And then use those traits and personalities to write the journal entries in the way you think they would.
I would have liked if you had included in your author's note why you changed Sita's social status to a peasant and why you included the part about her caring for a sick grandmother. In the original, she is a princess herself. You also neglected to include what Rama had to do in order to marry Sita - string the bow. Maybe you could mention in your author's note why you decided to make those changes!
I love the topic of epic love for your storybook and that it is told by the god of love and desire. Your introduction was great! I enjoyed the parallel with Cupid, it allows the reader to understand more of the type of god that Kama is in the Indian culture.
Your first story, about. SIta and Raman, was short and sweet. I like that you decided to include diary entries from both characters in the same story. I was surprised that you made Sita a peasant in your adaptation of the story. I think it would be beneficial to the reader if you included that Sita was a princess and that Rama won her hand in marriage by bending Shiva's bow, in your Author's note. That way the reader can fully appreciate and understand the changes you've made with your version.
I also think that your storybook would look great if you changed the background from white to a color representative of love, such as pink or red. There are also many fonts to choose from on Google sites that would fit the theme of your storybook.
I look forward to reading about Mandodari and Ravana and your idea of what their love story would be.
Hey Courtney! I am commenting on your introduction and first story today. First of all, beautiful cover photo you have there. The vibrant colors of Shakti and Shiva look awesome and it really likes like these two are in love. The title you chose for your storybook suits itself. After reading your introduction, I think your storybook is going to be really interesting! Nice touch on making yourself, the author, a god haha. I liked reading both Sita and Rama’s point of views. It makes it easier to relate to the character when you can understand their thoughts. I feel like things escalated rather quickly in your dialogue though. Since your storybook is about “Legends of Love” I would have liked to read more about their passion for each other. You showed Rama’s passion for Sita pretty well by having him describe her beauty etc etc but I felt like with Sita she was lacking emotion. Overall your storybook looks great so far and I can’t wait to read more of the love stories you write!
First off let me say great job! I always love reading people's storybook's because of all the creativity that it takes to make up these stories! I loved the cover photo that you used on your storybook also! It depicts exactly what your storybook is about. Also I really like that you use different color font to help illustrate when a different person is speaking.
I really like the idea of your storybook. After reading the introduction I am excited to read the remaining stories. The first story about Rama and Sita was great. I liked that you wrote the story as journal entries because it gives a personal feeling to the story since we are reading each person's inner thoughts. You did a great job showing how much Rama and Sita were in love with each other! Also I liked that you made Sita a peasant in your story because it really does give off that forbidden love feel when you read it. I can't wait to read the other stories! Great job!!
I was really excited to paired up with you this week, especially when I realized that I haven't visited your project before! I can already see from your cover page that you wrote a story pertaining to Rama and Sita. Since it has been a while since we've read the Ramayana, it is refreshing to read a story pertaining to them.
I like the purple font against the white background in your intro. It's really eye catching and appealing! I like the feel that your narrator presents to your audience. You did a great job in being direct with the focus of the Storybook and what plots the reader is expected to come by.
Although your take on Sita and Rama's love story took a different direction, I thoroughly enjoyed it. You did a great job in indicating which journal, and from who's perspective, we were reading from. You also kept the size of each excerpt about the same length, which didn't keep the reader's attention on only one character's perspective for too long.
I was going through the stack of projects and your title really captured my attention. By reading the title, I could tell the story will cover Rama and Sita. I like the image you have on the cover page of Shiva and Shakti.
Reading your introduction, I loved how you related Kamadeva and Cupid as brothers and one being adopted. I found it humorous. I love his advice at the end of the paragraph. "Love is an emotion that you mortals need to survive, so keep on searching if you haven't found it yet."
I like the simplicity of your layout; however, I think a little colored background would look lively. I did not notice any grammar errors which helps your story flow very easily.
I loved how organized the journals were. They were labeled with the characters' name and that helps the reader a lot in understanding whose perspective the story is being told from.
Hello Courtney! I loved you storybook because it was organized and very simple. There weren't that much graphic, but sometimes being simple is nice! I love how you made the narrator related to cupid. It was very clever for you to describe the story behind why Kama and cupid are different races. My favorite sentence from your introduction was "Love is an emotion that you mortals need to survive, so keep on searching if you haven’t found it yet." I believe that we really do need love to survive.
I liked how the story of Rama and Sita was set up! Having a journal entry from two different person gives a very different view of the whole story. I liked how the journal entry was simple and sweet, but I think it would be better if you could add more details to each days event. The formatting was great and there were no grammatical errors! Great work !
Hey Courtney, I just wanted to leave a comment on your wall about how much I like the layout of your blog. I like that is very colorful but it is also very clean and organized at the same time. I love the different tones of pinks, purples, and oranges. I also like the horizontal navigation bar. I think it makes everything very organized.
Hey Courtney, I just wanted to comment on the design and layout of your blog. I think it's very easy to navigate, but I also love the colors. The pinks, purples and oranges make me think of all the color and life in Indian clothing, but it's also very subtle so it doesn't overpower the words on your blog. I think it's great!
Hi Courtney!! Your design and layout of your blog is so cute (I also have the same one so of course I like yours). It is really easy to see all the 'weeks and storytelling' tabs at the top in and orderly fashion. Your blog is easy to use and I like the images that you have used in each post. It is really organized so great job!
Hello Courtney! This is my first time visiting your storybook and I am excited to get a chance to read and review it. Your title “Legends of Love” suggests that I will be getting a change to read about maybe some of my favorite characters. I like the simple white background you decided to use for your website. It resembles the same as a book that you would read.
I enjoyed your introduction and I thought that it was written perfectly. You introduced the main narrator of the story. I never knew cupid had another sibling! That is so cool. Another thing I would like to note is your last two paragraphs. It was nice that you gave a brief preview of what the reader should expect by introducing two of the main stories that you will be covering. I must say, I am excited to get to read about Ravana and Mandodari. I’m used to see him a just an evil person. Maybe he is a different person?!
Hi Courtney! Your blog webpage is another one of my favorites in the class. What makes more more unique is all the different labels that you have on the sides of your blog. Your's is more "tech savvy" from the RSS feed and the Weather bar. You also choose a nice template. Finally I like the way you have all your labels spread horizontally across the page.
It seems like your storybook is coming along very well. I think it's really neat and creative that you chose to write the introduction from the perspective of Kama. He is definitely an interesting narrator. I like that you provided some background information about him for the reader. He fits really well with your theme.
You did a good job introducing your storybook as a whole. I read your introduction, and I felt like I had a really good idea of what the rest of the story would be about. I was looking forward to reading more.
I also think it's super creative that you wrote your first story as a series of journal entries. That gives the reader really great insight into Rama and Sita's perspectives firsthand. I don't know if you plan to do that for your other stories, but it works well. You're doing a great job, Courtney!
I am glad that I was paired with you this week. I did not have the chance yet to come back to your storybook and read about Mandodari and Ravana. It was another great addition to your storybook! I really like the format that you used, again, with the journal entries from both Mandodari and Ravana.
I like how you incorporated Sita into this story as well. It sort of ties both stories together. You did a great job of portraying Mandodari as the ever faithful wife. This story does convey the message of "love conquers all," because even through all of the hardships and evil acts committed by Ravana, Mandodari remained faithful and loved him nonetheless.
I did not come across any spelling or grammatical errors in your writing for this story. I am looking forward to the final addition to your storybook in the next few weeks. You have done a fantastic job!
Hello again, Courtney! I just finished reading your storybook post, Ravana and Mandodari, and I thought it was great! It was definitely a great story to add to your storybook. It is nice being able to see a different side of Ravana instead of the wing cutting, evil side that we have read in the Ramayana. Even though Ravana was so evil, it was nice that he still had Mandodari who still loved him even though he was such a cruel person. I didn’t see any spelling or grammatical errors on this post. The spacing of your post made it easier for me to read and the diary format also helped me to understand the thoughts of Ravana and Mandodari better. Overall, great job on your storybook! Good luck with the rest of this semester and finals that are coming up!
Hello! Everything about your week 10 Famous Last words was going great until I head that you held a tarantula. I cannot believe that! I am terrified of spiders and I would probably rather lose 400 bucks than hold a spider! Did they have those at the medieval fair? I bet taking 19 hours this semester is hard! I can’t believe you are in that many wow! I hope everything goes well for you after graduation!
Your introduction was so cute! The way that you use Kama to introduce the topic is such a good idea. She is a “middle ground” of love that all of the stories have in common but she is not involved herself. It really ties it all together and lets the reader know what to expect. I love that you also wrote about Shantanu and Ganga. The story is forever ingrained in my mind. It was so casual in The Mahabhrata I couldn’t believe it. The diary was a genius way to let the reader into each of their minds as every event happened. Using Shantanu and Ganga’s posts side by side so accurately showed their different concerns and problems they face throughout their story. Ganga wants so desperately to tell Shantanu why she is so crazy and having to hold it back breaks her heart. I loved reading this story! You capture the feelings and thoughts of Shantanu and Ganga so perfectly.
Hi Courtney!
ReplyDeleteI love that you chose the god of love and desire to tell your stories! I chose a god to tell the stories of my storybook, as well! I love the part that you included about Cupid! I like that you added the part about wanting to read a basic love story then this storybook isn't for you. I like the honesty that you are giving to the reader. Also, this prepares readers for the epic love stories you are choosing to tell! Rama and Sita is definitely a good choice since Rama is the hero of The Ramayana. I am interested to see the story you tell of Ravana and Mandodari. I love the way that you wrote the introduction with so much personality. The attitude of the narrator is so sassy and I love it! I think that your stories will be great and I can't wait to read them!
Hi Courtney! Awesome idea of doing a love story and I can see that you are focusing on Rama and Sita as well. Also I liked how you included Cupid in your story, that is a clever idea! Rama and Sita are always a good choice since they are the main characters in the Ramayana, so their love story should be pretty simple. I'm really digging the fairytale vibe you're adding to your stories. I am a sucker for fairytales so your stories will be very interesting to me! Moreover, I'm looking forward to reading Ravana and Madodari! Since I already know a lot about Rama and Sita, I'm interested in reading the love connection between Ravana and Madodari. We always see Ravana as this cold hearted person and it would be different to see a different and soft side of him! Overall, I really like your storybook so far, the topic is love and I'm all about love stories! I am definitely looking forward to reading more stories and read all the love connections of these characters! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteCourtney, I like how you decided to write about these epics love stories. I definitely think that this is a topic that must be explored. It is definitely interesting and something that I wanted to read about. I also liked how you decided to write from diary entries. I think that this is a great way to explore in depth each relationship form the each couple member’s own perspective. I think that it is great.
ReplyDeleteThe layout of your site looks great. It is very clean and readable. However, I would recommend that you remove the search bar because there is no need for it.
I think that your story was very well written and I really saw no major grammar mistakes. If there was one thing that I would recommend it would be to exclude the part about Cupid. I really think that it was just useless information that didn’t add to your story. Overall, I think that it looks great.
Hey Courtney,
ReplyDeleteFirst off, super cute picture! It looks like the Indian version of a Nicholas Sparks novel. Love it! Your introduction was very cute as well. I enjoyed the way you played off of the reader’s familiarity with Cupid as the bringer of love. I found the ethnicities part to be a little bit weird though. There was a little bit of confusion at the end of the introduction as well. I assumed that Kamadeva would be guiding us through all of the stories as he/she (I’m not really sure) states at the beginning, yet the end of the introduction it is telling the reader to read the stories ourselves.
The preview of each love story was had me excited. I am looking forward to seeing how you are going to tie Kama to these love stories. Was it Kama who shot them with a love arrow to get them to fall in love with one another? Great job! Looking forward to reading the rest!
Hi Courtney, I just wanted to say thank you for leaving such a nice comment on my Portfolio Story The Valakhilyas’ Plea. It is the nicest thing that anyone has ever said about my writing. To answer your question, I never really thought about directing movies and to be honest, I never pegged that horror was a genre that I was really good at writing. Anyway, thanks so much for your nice comments.
ReplyDeleteCourtney, I absolutely love your storybook!! We are basically writing from the same point of view, so, it is really nice to read someone else's introduction and first love story post. I like your layout a lot and the writing style. It is really witty and inviting. I also want to tell you that I appreciate you commenting on my blog throughout the semester and leaving me such great feedback! It has been so nice having a few classes with such a sweet girl. I really cannot wait to keep reading your storybook throughout the semester! You rock.
ReplyDeleteCourtney, I am commenting on Rama and Sita. First of all, I think that it was a very smart idea to have this told from their personal diary entries because it shows readers first hand, raw accounts of each character. I also liked that you chose to insert a disclaimer about how each entry has not been edited. It was a great way to get my attention, introduce what was going on, and give the reader insight into Rama and Sita’s minds.
ReplyDeleteI also liked that you decided to have their entries interlock to tell a full story. It was a great way to move the story forward. You did a great job here by giving each their own views and personal observations. Stylistically, I like that you chose to separate the entries by color and name. This helps the reader know who is speaking, and it keeps everything very clean and organized. Great job.
Hey Courtney!
ReplyDeleteI am commenting on your storybook introduction and first story. I think your storybook sounds really interesting, based off of what I read in the introduction. I really like how you embraced the author being a god. By that I mean that I cracked up when I saw you refer to the photo at the bottom as "a photo of yourself." Anyway, your introduction was good.
For your first story, I feel like I was left hanging in a lot of places. I really liked the format and how you told the story from both points of view. However, I think you could have added a little more to each of the entries and filled in a few holes. Your idea is great, but I think it just needs to be fleshed out a little more. I am really looking forward to reading more of your stories and learning about other love stories of the gods!
Hello Courtney,
ReplyDeleteI very much enjoyed that you chose to write your first story form the perspective of, not one, but both Sita and Rama. It was very interesting to hear both sides of their story. It made me think of movies when you can hear what each character is thinking. It really gives you so much opportunity to give your character his/her own personality. I loved the little comment you made about Sita not being interesting in politics. I was a little confused because you went from Rama not being able to look at Sita to them all of the sudden meeting. How did they meet exactly? I feel as though that is something important to add. I definitely would have liked to hear a little bit more emotion for both Sita and Rama. Since it is a love story, there should be more distinguishing personality in their journal entries, as well as more emotion. Overall, good job!
Comments for Storybook
ReplyDeleteIntroduction:
I like the concept of writing of the God of Love introducing these diaries of couples in love. The fact that you made him related to Cupid was a cute little addition. Now, I like that you're going to use diary entries for both man and woman of the couple, that way we see both perspectives. I really like that! However, it would have also been pretty cool to tell the love stories from the perspective of Kama. Since you use him as the narrator of the introduction, it seems like that was where you were going with it. He could talk about his involvement in their meeting and how he made them fall in love.
I didn't feel like Rama and Sita had their own distinct voices in their journal entries. What I mean by that is the journal entries for both of them are written with the same tone and feeling. It sounds like either one of them could have written those. I think it would beneficial if you really picture what they're like. What are their personalities? How are they different? And then use those traits and personalities to write the journal entries in the way you think they would.
I would have liked if you had included in your author's note why you changed Sita's social status to a peasant and why you included the part about her caring for a sick grandmother. In the original, she is a princess herself. You also neglected to include what Rama had to do in order to marry Sita - string the bow. Maybe you could mention in your author's note why you decided to make those changes!
Hi Courtney!
ReplyDeleteI love the topic of epic love for your storybook and that it is told by the god of love and desire. Your introduction was great! I enjoyed the parallel with Cupid, it allows the reader to understand more of the type of god that Kama is in the Indian culture.
Your first story, about. SIta and Raman, was short and sweet. I like that you decided to include diary entries from both characters in the same story. I was surprised that you made Sita a peasant in your adaptation of the story. I think it would be beneficial to the reader if you included that Sita was a princess and that Rama won her hand in marriage by bending Shiva's bow, in your Author's note. That way the reader can fully appreciate and understand the changes you've made with your version.
I also think that your storybook would look great if you changed the background from white to a color representative of love, such as pink or red. There are also many fonts to choose from on Google sites that would fit the theme of your storybook.
I look forward to reading about Mandodari and Ravana and your idea of what their love story would be.
Hey Courtney! I am commenting on your introduction and first story today. First of all, beautiful cover photo you have there. The vibrant colors of Shakti and Shiva look awesome and it really likes like these two are in love. The title you chose for your storybook suits itself. After reading your introduction, I think your storybook is going to be really interesting! Nice touch on making yourself, the author, a god haha. I liked reading both Sita and Rama’s point of views. It makes it easier to relate to the character when you can understand their thoughts. I feel like things escalated rather quickly in your dialogue though. Since your storybook is about “Legends of Love” I would have liked to read more about their passion for each other. You showed Rama’s passion for Sita pretty well by having him describe her beauty etc etc but I felt like with Sita she was lacking emotion. Overall your storybook looks great so far and I can’t wait to read more of the love stories you write!
ReplyDeleteHey Courtney!
ReplyDeleteFirst off let me say great job! I always love reading people's storybook's because of all the creativity that it takes to make up these stories! I loved the cover photo that you used on your storybook also! It depicts exactly what your storybook is about. Also I really like that you use different color font to help illustrate when a different person is speaking.
I really like the idea of your storybook. After reading the introduction I am excited to read the remaining stories. The first story about Rama and Sita was great. I liked that you wrote the story as journal entries because it gives a personal feeling to the story since we are reading each person's inner thoughts. You did a great job showing how much Rama and Sita were in love with each other! Also I liked that you made Sita a peasant in your story because it really does give off that forbidden love feel when you read it. I can't wait to read the other stories! Great job!!
Hi Courtney!
ReplyDeleteI was really excited to paired up with you this week, especially when I realized that I haven't visited your project before! I can already see from your cover page that you wrote a story pertaining to Rama and Sita. Since it has been a while since we've read the Ramayana, it is refreshing to read a story pertaining to them.
I like the purple font against the white background in your intro. It's really eye catching and appealing! I like the feel that your narrator presents to your audience. You did a great job in being direct with the focus of the Storybook and what plots the reader is expected to come by.
Although your take on Sita and Rama's love story took a different direction, I thoroughly enjoyed it. You did a great job in indicating which journal, and from who's perspective, we were reading from. You also kept the size of each excerpt about the same length, which didn't keep the reader's attention on only one character's perspective for too long.
Hello Courtney!
ReplyDeleteI was going through the stack of projects and your title really captured my attention. By reading the title, I could tell the story will cover Rama and Sita. I like the image you have on the cover page of Shiva and Shakti.
Reading your introduction, I loved how you related Kamadeva and Cupid as brothers and one being adopted. I found it humorous. I love his advice at the end of the paragraph. "Love is an emotion that you mortals need to survive, so keep on searching if you haven't found it yet."
I like the simplicity of your layout; however, I think a little colored background would look lively. I did not notice any grammar errors which helps your story flow very easily.
I loved how organized the journals were. They were labeled with the characters' name and that helps the reader a lot in understanding whose perspective the story is being told from.
Great work, Courtney!
Hello Courtney! I loved you storybook because it was organized and very simple. There weren't that much graphic, but sometimes being simple is nice! I love how you made the narrator related to cupid. It was very clever for you to describe the story behind why Kama and cupid are different races. My favorite sentence from your introduction was "Love is an emotion that you mortals need to survive, so keep on searching if you haven’t found it yet." I believe that we really do need love to survive.
ReplyDeleteI liked how the story of Rama and Sita was set up! Having a journal entry from two different person gives a very different view of the whole story. I liked how the journal entry was simple and sweet, but I think it would be better if you could add more details to each days event. The formatting was great and there were no grammatical errors! Great work !
Hey Courtney, I just wanted to leave a comment on your wall about how much I like the layout of your blog. I like that is very colorful but it is also very clean and organized at the same time. I love the different tones of pinks, purples, and oranges. I also like the horizontal navigation bar. I think it makes everything very organized.
ReplyDeleteHey Courtney, I just wanted to comment on the design and layout of your blog. I think it's very easy to navigate, but I also love the colors. The pinks, purples and oranges make me think of all the color and life in Indian clothing, but it's also very subtle so it doesn't overpower the words on your blog. I think it's great!
ReplyDeleteHi Courtney!! Your design and layout of your blog is so cute (I also have the same one so of course I like yours). It is really easy to see all the 'weeks and storytelling' tabs at the top in and orderly fashion. Your blog is easy to use and I like the images that you have used in each post. It is really organized so great job!
ReplyDeleteHello Courtney! This is my first time visiting your storybook and I am excited to get a chance to read and review it. Your title “Legends of Love” suggests that I will be getting a change to read about maybe some of my favorite characters. I like the simple white background you decided to use for your website. It resembles the same as a book that you would read.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your introduction and I thought that it was written perfectly. You introduced the main narrator of the story. I never knew cupid had another sibling! That is so cool. Another thing I would like to note is your last two paragraphs. It was nice that you gave a brief preview of what the reader should expect by introducing two of the main stories that you will be covering. I must say, I am excited to get to read about Ravana and Mandodari. I’m used to see him a just an evil person. Maybe he is a different person?!
Hi Courtney! Your blog webpage is another one of my favorites in the class. What makes more more unique is all the different labels that you have on the sides of your blog. Your's is more "tech savvy" from the RSS feed and the Weather bar. You also choose a nice template. Finally I like the way you have all your labels spread horizontally across the page.
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ReplyDeleteIt seems like your storybook is coming along very well. I think it's really neat and creative that you chose to write the introduction from the perspective of Kama. He is definitely an interesting narrator. I like that you provided some background information about him for the reader. He fits really well with your theme.
You did a good job introducing your storybook as a whole. I read your introduction, and I felt like I had a really good idea of what the rest of the story would be about. I was looking forward to reading more.
I also think it's super creative that you wrote your first story as a series of journal entries. That gives the reader really great insight into Rama and Sita's perspectives firsthand. I don't know if you plan to do that for your other stories, but it works well. You're doing a great job, Courtney!
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ReplyDeleteI am glad that I was paired with you this week. I did not have the chance yet to come back to your storybook and read about Mandodari and Ravana. It was another great addition to your storybook! I really like the format that you used, again, with the journal entries from both Mandodari and Ravana.
I like how you incorporated Sita into this story as well. It sort of ties both stories together. You did a great job of portraying Mandodari as the ever faithful wife. This story does convey the message of "love conquers all," because even through all of the hardships and evil acts committed by Ravana, Mandodari remained faithful and loved him nonetheless.
I did not come across any spelling or grammatical errors in your writing for this story. I am looking forward to the final addition to your storybook in the next few weeks. You have done a fantastic job!
Hello again, Courtney! I just finished reading your storybook post, Ravana and Mandodari, and I thought it was great! It was definitely a great story to add to your storybook. It is nice being able to see a different side of Ravana instead of the wing cutting, evil side that we have read in the Ramayana. Even though Ravana was so evil, it was nice that he still had Mandodari who still loved him even though he was such a cruel person. I didn’t see any spelling or grammatical errors on this post. The spacing of your post made it easier for me to read and the diary format also helped me to understand the thoughts of Ravana and Mandodari better. Overall, great job on your storybook! Good luck with the rest of this semester and finals that are coming up!
ReplyDeleteHello! Everything about your week 10 Famous Last words was going great until I head that you held a tarantula. I cannot believe that! I am terrified of spiders and I would probably rather lose 400 bucks than hold a spider! Did they have those at the medieval fair? I bet taking 19 hours this semester is hard! I can’t believe you are in that many wow! I hope everything goes well for you after graduation!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction was so cute! The way that you use Kama to introduce the topic is such a good idea. She is a “middle ground” of love that all of the stories have in common but she is not involved herself. It really ties it all together and lets the reader know what to expect.
ReplyDeleteI love that you also wrote about Shantanu and Ganga. The story is forever ingrained in my mind. It was so casual in The Mahabhrata I couldn’t believe it.
The diary was a genius way to let the reader into each of their minds as every event happened. Using Shantanu and Ganga’s posts side by side so accurately showed their different concerns and problems they face throughout their story. Ganga wants so desperately to tell Shantanu why she is so crazy and having to hold it back breaks her heart.
I loved reading this story! You capture the feelings and thoughts of Shantanu and Ganga so perfectly.